Writing Goals

Work On sentence fluency

Use a variety of sentance starters

Self edit carefuly

Monday, May 16, 2011

Inside Life

There he was Carl Flaxington on the dream run in the super bowl. Down by six they just needed this touchdown and the extra point. It sounded so easy, he went over it in his head 100 times. Just say hike and throw the ball he thought to himself. "Here we are 3 seconds left in the 4th quarter the Broncos down by six to the Colts. It looks like the broncos aren't giving up for 5 yards away on 4th down," said the announcer. Carl snaps the ball looks right fakes left. It was open the receiver in the end zone he just had to get it there. The ball flew out of his hand like a bullet. The receiver caught it and the crowd went crazy. For the extra point and it split the uprights. The Broncos won the super bowl! Then the Quarter back got sad and left before the ceremonies.

Once everybody was back in Denver he called a meeting telling them why he had left and they understood and wanted to help. Then some how the coached had found Carl's phone and heard the voice mails and felt bad. Carl's mom died in an unfortunate accident and his dad critically injured. His dad was on the brink of death and his brother had a mental condition so he came and lived with him. For Carl on the night of the super bowl this was not the news he wanted to hear. In the mail he started getting flowers and gifts but he knew of only one thing that would make him forget about this.

So the next day he got a letter to come to the police station to talk with some councilors to over come this. Carl went to the police station but not for the councilors but to try to find his parents killer. Next he went to a private eye investigator to get clues a photos of the guy and the crime scene. He took all that to the Lawyers Firm that his parents knew. After a couple days they were in court and it went by fast because of what he had done to that family and the result was guilty Carl and his brother cheered and could live in peace but they still had to live with the fact that there parents were gone.


1 comment:

  1. Such a tragic story! This is the sort of topic that you could write a whole book about. Nice job!

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